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Friday 6 March 2020

ANZAC Diary Entry

WALT use descriptive language
 This week, We read a book called ANZAC Violin. The book was about one of the soldiers named Alexander Atkins took his violin to war with him. He played the violin for the other soldiers during the bad times. In the book, the author added a part from his diary which was describing how the war was. So our teacher gave us the task to write a diary entry using key words from the book. We had to use an attributes chart To brainstorm ideas for what we were gonna write. It also had to be real, we couldn't talk about unicorns or dragons. We were allowed to make as gory as we wanted but it also had to be appropriate. Then we got started on to our writing. So here is my diary entry.

As I lay wounded, the awful sound of the screams went into my ears and into my head. All I could see was the injured people who were dying. The thought that I could be just like them haunted me. I could see the blood gushing out of corpses and people collapsing to the ground. I could hear the gunshots being fired and the people shouting. It was very dirty and a bit muddy but it didn’t matter. I took a deep breath and inhaled a bunch of dust. The painful sound of the bullets scared me. As I tried to slowly crawl away, Someone landed dead in front of me. I gagged at the rancid smell of the dead corpse and went around it. I got up and started to stealthily walked. I could see bloody dead corpses in ditches half buried and people slowly dying.


Thank you!

1 comment:

  1. Hi Tweeny
    Wow that is one very descriptive diary entry but I must say that is probably what it was actually like back then. This is why we remember these soldiers.
    Keep up the great work.
    Miss Rader

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