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Tuesday, 18 September 2018

The Super - Pill

I was picking up rubbish on a normal day until I found a strange bean, it was glowing so picked it up and as I walked to my class I tripped and hit my head. When I woke up I found a creepy person looking at me kind of like that movie I was watching of a clown. creepy, right. “ Hi Tweeny” said the creature. “ Okay 1. who are you? 2. how do you know me” I said with surprised look on my face. “ I know many things one thing i know is that pink glowing pill you are holding gives you the ability to make someone have an undying love for you with a touch of your hand” he said. “ also my name is Mr Pill”. “ you only have 24 hours to bring back everyone because Mr Dimension made a portal and put everyone in it and they are in grave danger so it’s up to you” Mr Pill said. “Okay” I said “also were you watching me the whole time”. “Hehe yeah” Mr Pill said. “So take the pill now and touch me” he said. I said eww no, but he said it was to train. “Also if you touch me the second time, it’ll wear off. So I touched him and he smiled at me then I touched him again and he stopped. “ So that is how it works” said Mr Pill. I have to go but remember they count on you to save them. Then he disappeared into thin air. So then I went out of the school and saw someone, only one person there. The cutest boy in school, Robert Johnson. So I called out to him, and he came running to me and asked me where is everyone and I said they got lost in a dimension and I have to save them. He wanted to help and I said okay. “Okay let me touch you” I said. What happened with Mr Pill happened with robert but it was somewhat satisfying. Anyway... Ahem I touched him again and went to the portal, which was over the mall roof. I spread out my wings (Also yes I had wings because I am cool like that). And flew to the mall. I told Robert to stay outside but he said that I might die so I kissed his head and said I will be back. I went in and everyone was in a bubble floating around and Mr Dimension was sleeping so I popped all the bubbles and he woke up. “WHO ARE YOU” he said. “I am Tweeny, The Queen Of Love” I yelled.

2 comments:

  1. Hi There Tweeny, My name is Abby and I am a year 6 at Yaldhurst Model School, YMS for short.

    I can't really see the writing, so it would be awesome if you could fix that.

    I really like the first sentence, because it made me want to read the rest.

    Next time you could post it when it was finshed or put "To be continued." and you could look at your blog after, to see if the writing has gone off the page or not.

    Kind Regards,
    Abby.

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  2. Fixed it. Hope you enjoy the Story

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